Corazon Herido

[3S4S4D3Y3Z]

QUIEN TE CREES QUE ERES PARA VENIR A JUGAR CON MI CORAZON, SI ME ENAMORE, NO TE LO NEGARE, PERO NO POR ESO TE DEJARE DESTRUIR EL POCO CORAZON QUE TENGO, PORQUE POR CABRONES COMO TU EN MI VOCABULARIO NO EXISTE LA PALABRA AMOR, SOLO EXISTE ODIO,DOLOR, Y RENCOR, Y ESO ES POCO PARE LO QUE AN JUGADO CON MI CORAZON.

 

[~*Lil_Lokita*~]

LA NETA CASI NO ME GUSTO SORRY

 

[acuario5764]

its alright

 

[3S4S4D3Y3Z]

Thankz Anywayz.. Im Not Really Gud At It.pero I Keep Practicing..thankz For Tellin Me La Verdad..that Will Help Me More To Get Betta

 

[lupe Flores]

well u need to find otras palabras para que se escuche mejor but is ok

 

[3S4S4D3Y3Z]

Wat Do u Mean find otras palabraass.. yah cause i used them like en casi all ma poemz.. verdad?

 

[chicano]

Wat Do u Mean find otras palabraass.. yah cause i used them like en casi all ma poemz.. verdad?

The poem wasn't that good, what you need to do is organize your work a little better and put them in lines instead of like a paragraph.

Use different words and meanings, and most of all.. make every one of those words come from your heart. You'll get better as time goes on, everyone has to start sometime.

 

[3S4S4D3Y3Z]

Thankz Chicano For Da Advise