Needs a Title...

[Dazed]

inching towards death i feel the end ever near
the wind teasing my hair with the life i held so dear
in darkness my fate will become crystal clear
regrets haunt my dreams finally making me sincere

insensate, deprived; i lack a human sensation
apathetic and dull isolated from the worlds adulation
to dream of an escape, a paradise with no deprivation
free to roam in happiness...with a heart overflowing with elation

i crumble and shy away from the peace that turns to hell
wrecking havoc in my mind; this insanity i know it well
letting corrupt thoughts influence my soul for it to dwell
immorality conquers giving me a new nightmare to tell

close my eyes and hope for even the slightest bit of serenity
wishing that even the smallest amount of meditation brings me tranquility
i try to struggle and fight for even a small dose of felicity
only to have my skin crawl once more bringing me back to reality

 

[a_cute_jasmin]

Wow Dazed your really good at this. Can't get enough of your poetry...even though I suck at vocabulary...lol Hmmmm a title...idk...maybe Death or idk.

 

[Dazed]

aww thanks!!

lol @ death...maybe something not so obvious...

 

[HomeyG]

lol i like it

 

[a_cute_jasmin]

aww thanks!!

lol @ death...maybe something not so obvious...

lol yeah your right...I suck at this hehehe

 

[Verónica]

damn dazed....is your reality this unpleasant...you seem like a normal person btu the poetry shows that wicked and angry sad side of you

 

[Verónica]

the poetry you write is like no other i've read....ummm the title??....(wooowww!!...i don't like the time that you posted this thread....oh my lord!!!)...anyway, call it..uummmm.....idk

 

[Verónica]

hmmm dark realities......

 

[Dazed]

Thanks HomeyG


veronica: my reality is not unpleasant..when it comes to writing..i just dont have any limits...i write about everything...but i choose not to post everything else...for the reason that everybody else writes about the same thing...and i choose to be different...the poem was inspired by a picture...and though my reality doesnt consist of this much angst we all have moments in our life when we feel this way...everyone has a dark side veronica...im just more aware of mine..

 

[Dazed]

hmmm "dark realities" i like that!

 

[Verónica]

you're tight girly

Thanks HomeyG


veronica: my reality is not unpleasant..when it comes to writing..i just dont have any limits...i write about everything...but i choose not to post everything else...for the reason that everybody else writes about the same thing...and i choose to be different...the poem was inspired by a picture...and though my reality doesnt consist of this much angst we all have moments in our life when we feel this way...everyone has a dark side veronica...im just more aware of mine..

damn dazed.......forget the forensics and stick to this.....lol....:] you're very very talented

 

[Verónica]

ok

hmmm "dark realities" i like that!

ok koo...lol...:]

 

[Mr Unique]

great verse dazed...ummm4 a title try umm inching towards the wings of death...or mayb towards the flames of hell idk just a sugestion....

 

[Mr Unique]

how bout hellic realities...

 

[Leto]

inching towards death i feel the end ever near
the wind teasing my hair with the life i held so dear
in darkness my fate will become crystal clear
regrets haunt my dreams finally making me sincere

insensate, deprived; i lack a human sensation
apathetic and dull isolated from the worlds adulation
to dream of an escape, a paradise with no deprivation
free to roam in happiness...with a heart overflowing with elation

i crumble and shy away from the peace that turns to hell
wrecking havoc in my mind; this insanity i know it well
letting corrupt thoughts influence my soul for it to dwell
immorality conquers giving me a new nightmare to tell

close my eyes and hope for even the slightest bit of serenity
wishing that even the smallest amount of meditation brings me tranquility
i try to struggle and fight for even a small dose of felicity
only to have my skin crawl once more bringing me back to reality

How about the AWAKENING.....

Great poem ,seems like you might be waking up from a dream , or are waking from one reality to another.

 

[Dazed]

damn dazed.......forget the forensics and stick to this.....lol....:] you're very very talented

lol thanks!!!...i would but i dont think writing poems would be a very stable job...i mean...i dont think very many people would actually buy this to read over and over again...know what i mean...i need something that would support me financially and unfortunately poetry wont do that for me..*sigh*

 

[Dazed]

Mrunique:...they all sounds pretty good lol...i liked wings of death...

 

[Dazed]

How about the AWAKENING.....

Great poem ,seems like you might be waking up from a dream , or are waking from one reality to another.

thank you!...some dreams are never meant to be left...

 

[\|/MANIAKK\|/]

Daaaaaaaaaaaaam Dazed U Got Skillz Gurl
A Good Title Fo Dis Poem : Escape. Escape From Reality An All Da Bull Shyt Dat Fallows. Well Das My Good Idea Hope It Helps

 

[Dazed]

thanks!!

and thanks for the suggestion also..