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Mr Unique

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The reflection of the person in the mirror
Leaves a taste in my soul so bitter
I hate the man staring back
Almost as much as I hate the evil that sets me off track
I can?t stand him, I now understand why so many wanna make my skull crack
There?s a feel of death in my fingers
Strangle myself is what the voices say, the darkness shifts lower and just lingers
But there?s one reason I keep on breathing, why I still live
Why I haven?t hollowed a bullet into my head or jumped off a rocky cliff
Put an end to my dome
And left my soul to forever walk alone
With no course, stuck between heaven and hell
Though there?s a motivation which keeps me going
Keeps the blood in my veins flowing
And slowly the shattered bits to my heart she?s sowing
So may broken pieces
I never thought my hate for the race of women would inch towards decreasing
But now it?s all gone
So our bond
Stronger than Tom Hagen and the Don
Deep relationship like a Muslim and the Koran
But it hurts severely like sinking wounds in alcohol, when I?m the one making her go the cold way
It disfigures my self esteem like Joseph in Genesis being sold away
It kills me silently like a noiseless menacing disease
It murders my soul with no fucking cease
Like the devil onto the weak
I need her strength
So my back won?t bend
I need my best friend
Or else my emotions will take longer to mend??


 

la_1_n_only

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hey pa' yo ui think your stuff is sick so i gave you a 10...........no doubt, mindnlowin, dont get it twisted.
 

DoeMemba

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i rate an 8..but that doesnt mean its a bad rate....i felt the concept needs much work but overall message is good....and the delivery was like an obese woman giving birth ......heavy as fuck :D
 

Mr Unique

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Thanx Jojo....

B : yea I felt there was certain parts where i kinda strayed on the wording...but its all good....:D :D...thanx 4 the obese woman feedback...;p

and thanx 2 E...

That makes my average a 9...:D
 

[Lil Boo]

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L0L..0HHH Y0U SAW i RATED iT??
TEHEHE..
iT WAS G00D i REALLY LiKE iT bUT
i DUNN0 i FELT Y0U LEFT S0ME THiNG`sZ 0UT..
N0 SE...
iT jUST NEEDED S0METHiNG
Y0U kN0W??
L0L
PER0 YEAh UN NUEVE!!
 

Mr Unique

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L0L..0HHH Y0U SAW i RATED iT??
TEHEHE..
iT WAS G00D i REALLY LiKE iT bUT
i DUNN0 i FELT Y0U LEFT S0ME THiNG`sZ 0UT..
N0 SE...
iT jUST NEEDED S0METHiNG
Y0U kN0W??
L0L
PER0 YEAh UN NUEVE!!

lol...simon...yea i know what u mean...mmm no se....orale simon q si :D
 

[Lil Boo]

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a 9 is too good actually.....i gave it an 8.....i seen him do better

L0L..WELL DAS Y0UR 0PiNi0N
MiSTER!
L0L...YEAh WELL i FELT LiKE iT WAS A 9
bUT i D0 AGREE WiT Y0U 0N
DA FACT DAT HE HAS D0NE A bETTER j0B
 

DoeMemba

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yea i thought the same 2....actually i didnt know how good it was...if it was aight...or just a flop....so i made a polll....:D

an 8 is not a flop ma nigga.....that'd be like below 3...even a 5 isnt a flop...it just means that isn't up to par
 

Mr Unique

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an 8 is not a flop ma nigga.....that'd be like below 3...even a 5 isnt a flop...it just means that isn't up to par

i know...i just said i wanted yall 2 rate it 2 see i fit wa sme just trippin on it being a flop...u know as an artist i have 2 reach "perfect" credential...lol...
 

DoeMemba

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what u needz to do is read ur rhymes outloud ..so that it flows in the brain...from a freestylers experience ...dats what niggaz be doin ....i be a perfectionist too..and i hate that sumtimes..coz im never satistied wit my shit
 

Mr Unique

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what u needz to do is read ur rhymes outloud ..so that it flows in the brain...from a freestylers experience ...dats what niggaz be doin ....i be a perfectionist too..and i hate that sumtimes..coz im never satistied wit my shit

simon simon...orale...yea I know what u mean me 2...but owell it make su better....
 

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i gaves ya a nine babe................it were a good poem...............good flow........:D :D :p.........member how i told you que for some things i get these tears in my eyes...........que no se como explicar well i gots them when you read it to me on the phone that day and the two more times i read it rite now......................:confused:
 

Mr Unique

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i gaves ya a nine babe................it were a good poem...............good flow........:D :D :p.........member how i told you que for some things i get these tears in my eyes...........que no se como explicar well i gots them when you read it to me on the phone that day and the two more times i read it rite now......................:confused:

thanx Ana.....i know...:p.....awwww babe...porq no me dijiste??...that day I mean....wait nvr mind I reread it it thought it was a slighty diff poem...so they were 'good" tears??
 
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